vox nihili

I was supposed to write a short screenplay set in the industrial revolution. Here goes... Between the Chimneys: The stage opens to London in 1850; a backdrop of greys, browns ...

This is great! I really don't have any edits, except the characters seem a little too courageous for ten year olds. Otherwise, there is nothing I can think of to ...

I have to say, this is lovely! A few edits: You need to go through and check for typos. There aren't many, but the few there are could easily be ...

I believe you have a very strong subject here. But the format isn't quite as strong as it could be. To me, it's mostly just a list of questions, "do ...

This is very good. The first criticism: it's way too much posted at once. I read the entirety of it only because it was so engrossing... (kudos for that!) but ...

This is an image of Lady Nasuada from the Inheritance least how I see her. The second image is of Toph and Katara from the Avatar series. Do enjoy. *Note: ...

This was refreshing! Finally a bunny who isn't so cuddly. I have an idea for a title if you are so inclined to change it... An Ungrateful Bunny

I am grinning now, like some idiot described in the poem. One suggestion: try shortening it a little. Too much of this is really overkill. In the first half, I ...

Not much to say, just read. Please, feel free to criticize me out the door, :smt053 ........ “Congratulations! You’re pregnant.” Jerri Polain smiled, her hand resting lightly on her stomach. ...

It's very well done. What media did you use? Whichever it is, it seems to be your strong point. Some criticisms: The "mwahaaahaa" really does nothing for the picture. The ...

My advice, you've got way too much crammed onto too small a page. The images would have been great, but you can't tell what they are between all the words. ...

Keep in mind for your second edit: First, the land inside the wall is not snowy and looks like summer, second, the outside the wall is darker, like it's dusk, ...

That format is way easier to read! I can read it now, and interpet it. First: this should be rated at least PG 13 due to the sexual references. So ...

It has a good ring to it, but I don't understand the point of it. Is it supposed to be illogical? Secondly, it is in desperate need for some simple ...

In my opinion, yes. There is no way to absoutely prove something. You can prove it "beyond reasonable doubt" but there will always, absolutely always, be a loophole somewhere, even ...